As I experiment with the order of my paragraphs it seems like some can be rearranged while others cannot. The introduction is consistent with its spot because of the thesis and my introduction of thoughts. I also learned that I may need to explain things more because I have a tendency to assume that people know what I am talking about, but it's actually the complete opposite. The middle paragraphs seem like they can be interchangeable because they each introduce thoughts and ideas. I may play around with changing the order in my final draft.
It helped me to re-see my essay in that I am always so focused on things being where I first put them that I am afraid to change the location. It also helped me to see where I needed to explain more because just reading some paragraphs by them selves was very confusing. Overall today's class activities were good for me because it helps getting others to revise my paper. That is why the re-organizing of the paragraphs was good, because it helped me to see my essay in a different way.

I always used to wonder why my cousin went to the bathroom after most every meal. It just seemed like she may have had some internal stomach problems but it turns out she was going in there because she thought she wasn't beautiful. Let me explain; when you are struggling with the eating disorder known as bulimia nervosa, a person eats a lot of food and then needs to purge themselves of it so that they never gain weight and instead lose weight. I thought it was just random when she had the disorder but it turns out her mom had struggled with the exact same problem as a child. There are many different kinds of eating disorders and as of now there is no agreement on the causation of any of them. I hypothesize that genetics and the imbalance of serotonin causes eating disorders and therefore explains there heredity.

Are people more likely to have an eating disorder if a parent or relative has had one? Or do the pressures of the modern world alone cause them. These "Closet Disorders" stem from a certain lack of pride in ones appearance. Most people are quick to label these people extremists or say that they are in a phase. We need to look beyond our time period and really examine why people have eating disorders. This paper will seek to answer these questions while trying to gather the data to show the genetics of eating disorders. Many of the teenagers who struggle with eating disorders today, had a parent who struggled with the same disorder. Eating disorders are genetically caused and looking at neurotransmitters will help to prove it.

It is estimated that 8 million people in the U. S. struggle with some type of eating disorder. The American sense of being "perfect" certainly doesn't help this astounding figure. No pun intended. But I urge you to take a look past the American ideas of perfection and toward the scientific approach. Countless studies are showing that the imbalance of neurotransmitters can lead to eating disorders while sometimes incorporating depression. Depression is a state of being that is not healthy. Therefore when you are depressed it is easy to associate one unhealthy act with another, especially if the depression regards you body. Eating disorders are the most common disorder without a known cause! Genetics can tell us a lot about a person and they can also reveal the mystery behind eating disorders in regards to depression and neurotransmitter imbalances.

Thesis

Based on my research, the assumption that eating disorders are genetically caused appears to be qualified yet difficult to determine based on the varying case study results.

Berrettini, Wade, Dr. NCBI. U.S. National Library of Medicine, Nov.-Dec. 2004. Web. 05 Nov. 2013.

                This article is a credible source that I am using because it was written by a well-educated author who has been published many times. His credentials include a PhD in Psychiatry as well as an M.D. This article was published in 2004, however the information is still up to par. The author’s main goal in this article is to inform us that through studies that were done by geneticists, genes can influence if not cause the eating disorders that we suffer from today. The publishing source for this article would generally fit audience member who suffer from an eating disorder, know someone who has, or are interested in this field of study. Many people would be interested in this information because 10%-15% of Americans are currently suffering from an Eating disorder, and some of those people won’t even share that information with anyone. They would have mixed opinions of this articles topic because many people would want more evidence. They see eating disorders as something that society has done to people and not something that genes have done, but the can also not ignore facts of an imbalance of serotonin in the brain which may cause Anorexia Nervosa. The author incorporates evidence such as heredity, imbalance of chemicals in brain, psychopathology (substance abuse), depression and anxiety disorders. He is using all of these issues that are true today and showing how they can all cause or stem from having an eating disorder. This evidence builds credibility because of the many studies done on depression and anorexia living together, but it is also limited because some people don’t believe that a symptom of depression is having an eating disorder. Based on my own opinion, experience, and research I can agree with this author because of his knowledge on the subject and his statistics on the heredity of eating disorders. I think this article would be important to include in my essay because no matter what the audience thinks, it is a relative debate on my topic. 

Slane, Jennifer D., S. Alexandra Burt, and Kelly L. Klump. "Genetic And Environmental Influences

On Disordered Eating And Depressive Symptoms." International Journal Of Eating     Disorders 44.7(2011): 605-611. Academic Search Premier. Web. 8 Nov. 2013.

This article is a credible source for my research because of the context that it brings with eating disorders and depression. The authors’ credentials include Ph.D.’s in psychology. The study of psychology is key in the discussion of eating disorders because it all begins in the human mind. This article was published in the International Journal of Eating Disorders on November 1^st 2011. The authors’ main goals of this article are to inform and persuade about the causes of eating disorders and how they can affect our lives. The audience of this article would be the people who care about eating disorders as well as people affected by depression, who would agree that depression can be a causation or side effect to eating disorders. The authors incorporate statistical, analogical and testimonial evidence in this article. This builds their credibility because it shows that they know exactly what they are talking about and are able to accurately produce the results of their testing done in relation to eating disorders and depressive symptoms. It is limited in that to my knowledge, none of them have been affected by eating disorders. Based on my opinion I would fully agree with these authors and say that depression is closely tied in with eating disorders. This article is a good addition to my essay because it shows that depression which can be more common within families can be the start to eating disorders. This would put me one step closer in proving my thesis. 

Lein, Stefanie. "Types of Eating Disorders." Types of Eating Disorders. N.p., 2013. Web. 08 Nov. 2013.

I realized that not only do I need the genetic part of eating disorders but the information on eating disorders as well.

This article is a credible source for my research because the author is a doctor of pharmacy out of the University of Arizona. The author’s credentials include her bachelor’s degree in physiology, and the fact that she struggled with an eating disorder; Binge Eating. This article was published in 2013. The author’s main goal in this article is to inform the reader about the types of eating disorders that can affect the people around them. The publishing source for this article targets an audience that has close connections with eating disorders. The audience would be interested because of the real knowledge that this author brings to the table and would agree with the information that she provides. The author incorporates testimonial and anecdotal evidence in her article. The author builds credibility with her knowledge of each disorder. The limited aspect of this article comes from the fact that it is all information with no arguing points. I feel as though I need these facts in my essay because it will help readers gain a better understanding of each eating disorder so they can make the decision on whether or not it could relate to genetics. I agree with her information because she has provided a list of eating disorders and described them correctly without misusing any information or names. 

Feature, Gina Shaw WebMD. "Anorexia and Bulimia: Cracking the Genetic Code." WebMD. WebMD,         2005. Web. 08 Nov. 2013.

This article is a credible source for my research because the author has written for WebMD since 1999. Her credentials are that she is a senior writer with the Association of American Medical Colleges in Washington, D.C. As a freelancer, she has also written health articles for Ladies' Home Journal and writes regularly for medical organizations including the American Academy of Neurology. The author’s main goal in this article is to inform and teach people that anorexia may in fact be genetically passed down. This article generally targets people who are afflicted by a certain illness or disorder causing them to look up symptoms and treatment. They would be interested because they may suffer from any number of eating disorders and would disagree and agree with the author’s article. The author incorporates anecdotal, statistical and testimonial evidence on this topic. This evidence builds credibility because it allows the reader to see the true expertise of the author but it limits it in a way because of her conclusion. Based on my opinion, I would agree with this author’s skill set and evidence but not her conclusion. This article is important to my essay because of the facts and misconstrued conclusion that happens when you have a closed mind.